As he continued down the trail he met a group of squirrels. He noticed that they were eating some fresh fallen acorns. Brer Rabbit asked the squirrels if he could eat some of the acorns, in which the squirrels replied no. Feeling hungry by now, Brer Rabbit asked the squirrels if they had seen any food nearby this neck of the woods and all of the squirrels said they hadn’t so Brer Rabbit moved along down the trail.
As he continued down the trail Brer Rabbit became more and more hungry for something to eat. He thought to himself that anything at this point would do. Then at the far end of the trail where he had never been he saw a small blackberry bush with fresh, ripe berries. Brer Rabbit started bouncing down the path till he suddenly remembered that this was the Bear’s neck of the woods. But as he skidded to a halt it was too late, and Brer Rabbit had been caught in a hidden trap set by the Bear.
Brer Rabbit was suddenly swung of by his legs into the air in one fast swoop. He sat there dangling in the air by the rope and tree. Then Brer Rabbit caught glimpse of the Bear in the distance by the blackberry bushes. Brer Rabbit thought to himself that he knew he shouldn’t have come this far down the trail. He let his hunger overwhelm his decision making. Lastly, he thought this for sure would be the last time he would ever be hungry if he didn’t find a way down from this trap.
Brer Rabbit tried swinging himself up the rope to pull himself up the tree, but couldn’t grasp the it. Then the Bear in the distance caught sight of Brer Rabbit struggling in the distance. The Bear knowing the rabbit was going nowhere took his time eating berries before making his way to him. Meanwhile, Brer rabbit thought of a good idea. He began swinging himself on the rope from side to side gaining momentum with each swing. On his 5th swing he had almost gotten close enough to the branch above to grab it. On the 6th swing he reached for the limb, however narrowly slipped off it and lost all of his momentum. One good thing came from the swing attempt however. Brer Rabbit was able to free one leg. With this leg he grabbed the section of rope above his head and pulled it near his front two teeth.
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Then the bear, having had enough berries, started coming down the trail towards the rabbit. Brer Rabbit started rapidly gnawing at the rope to get free. Once the bear had gotten only feet away Brer Rabbit broke through the rope and fell from the trap! The bear stunned from what feat the rabbit had accomplished decided to let him get away. Brer Rabbit never went down that part of the trail again.
Author’s note: This story was inspired by Brer Rabbit. In some of the stories from this African Tale, he is a brave rabbit which throws caution to the wind. Often times it gets him in trouble or dangerous situations. I used bits and pieces from the original story, but also threw in a moral ending to the story. In fact, there are two morals, one for each main animal in the story. I stayed away from dialogue in this story to focus more on the setting and thought process of Brer Rabbit while he was trapped.
Bibliography: Brer Rabbit by Joel Chandler Harris
Author’s note: This story was inspired by Brer Rabbit. In some of the stories from this African Tale, he is a brave rabbit which throws caution to the wind. Often times it gets him in trouble or dangerous situations. I used bits and pieces from the original story, but also threw in a moral ending to the story. In fact, there are two morals, one for each main animal in the story. I stayed away from dialogue in this story to focus more on the setting and thought process of Brer Rabbit while he was trapped.
Bibliography: Brer Rabbit by Joel Chandler Harris
I immediately noticed how well written this story was from the first paragraph or two. I liked how the story followed this rhythm like a true fable. It was concise, yet there was a lot packed into the story--very well written! I was hoping Brer rabbit would get out of the trap, but I didn't know how he would. I thought it was very clever that he ended up being able to chew his way out.
ReplyDeleteI thought you did an awesome job of sticking to the fable set up. It was very well written. I was intrigued from the get go and was a little irritated with the other animals for not sharing. Oh well, haha. I also liked how you had the bear take his time making his way to Brer rabbit. Even for such a short story there was a lot of suspense. I haven't read the original story, but I really enjoyed yours.
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you structured your story into somewhat matching the structure of the original one. I also thought it was a good idea for you to limit the dialogue. Sometimes dialogue can be beneficial or harmful when telling a story. Your story was entertaining and well written! Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Tyler! I really like the way you wrote your story and the way it was put together. I have never read this original story before, but I really enjoyed yours, so it makes me want to read the original to see how it differs now! I really liked the almost suspense feel you gave to your story. It really added good character for everyone. Good job!
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