A naive wolf cannot figure out why he has no friends
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| W.H. Drake: The Two Jungle Books |
Sinbad presses his luck and ends up where he started
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| The Voyage: (Roc, by E. J. Detmold) |
A dad tells his son a story through the changing of story characters
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| Wikimedia: Father son Fishing |
Great story! I really enjoyed your story telling style and the ending!
ReplyDeleteI think you had a really strong beginning and to add even more depth to it, it might be helpful if you put more description into what types of animals were at the river. Were they all prey or were predators scared of the wolf too? The end of your story was the real wow moment of the piece. When the alpha spoke, I think your wording was perfect and it was a nice transition into the ending where the wolf got revenge on the animals who didn’t trust him. Overall to give your story some more detail you could add in a little background information about how the wolf doesn’t hang out with other wolfs. I thought that that was a really surprising detail and it wasn’t shared until the very end of the story. By introducing it in the beginning it will show the reader why the wolf is so alone and feels so alone.