Along the sea Odysseus and his men traveled for months. They
were growing tired and running low on food. They had drifted long from the land
which they called home. As the days passed, all that surrounded Odysseus and
his crew was water for miles, until one day. Finally, on the ninth day of the ninth
month at sea, one of the crew members aboard the ship spotted a small island in
the distance.
As the
crew sailed closer to the island they saw no immediate signs of civilization
however many goats wondered the island. In addition, another member spotted
crops which were growing across an open field. Lastly, Odysseus spotted nine
huts on the corner of the island. As he and his crew landed the vessel on shore,
they began to scavenge the island for much needed food. He and his crew took a
lamb and some of the ripe plantains growing in the field. As the men began to
replenish their bodies with the much needed food, Odysseus went out to explore
the rest of the small island. As he crest the center of the island he finally
spotted one of the inhabitants outside the hut. From which he deduced these
creatures were dwarfs. He made his way back to his crew and told them of the
news. Neither Odysseus nor his crew had ever seen a dwarf or the home of a
dwarf and were immediately intrigued with curiosity and interest. Odysseus
warned his crew of the unknown danger of the dwarfs and advised his crew
that they should leave, since they had taken enough from the island already.
However, the crew fought back the captain and the captain couldn’t resist his
own inner curiosity, so Odysseus and his crew made a plan to sneak into one of
the nine huts at nightfall.
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Upon nightfall,
Odysseus and his men began to sneak across the island to the group of huts.
Odysseys began looking for a door however could not find one. The rest of his
crew began searching as well and found no presumable points of entry either.
Then one of the members started yelling horrifically. Odysseus saw only shadows
drag away one of his crew. Then suddenly he himself was surrounded by a group
of nine shadows. The rest of the crew members fled to the ship across the island. The dwarfs captured the captain and took him inside the main
hut on the island. As Odysseus was being carried inside, he caught a glimpse of
the door hidden by palm leaves. Once inside the dwarfs began to argue about what to do with Odysseus
and his other trapped crew member. The head dwarf in charge decided that at
sunrise they would execute the thieves. All the dwarfs returned to their
respective huts and the head dwarf went to rest as well in the main hut. Once,
the head dwarf had fallen asleep, Odysseus and his trapped crew member devised
a plan to escape. The only problem was they couldn’t find the key to which the
door was locked with. The crew member asked: “How are we going to get through
the door without the key?” Odysseus replied, “Simply, we’ll unscrew the door
handle then put it on the other side.” And miraculously Odysseus and the
trapped crew member escaped and trapped the head dwarf in his own hut. As
Odysseus and his crew fled the island, Odysseus boasted with his victory and
yelled with excitement. The dwarfs ran out to the edge of the island however
were too late to hit Odysseus and his crew with their spears before they sailed away. And that was the
last time Odysseus and his crew ever landed on an island on the ninth day of
the ninth month.
Author’s Note: This story was inspired by The Land of the Cyclops
in Homer’s Odyssey. I wanted to take some parts of the journey which Odysseus
and his men did, however change the characters encountered and the method of
escape. In addition, I included a reoccurring theme of the number nine
throughout my storytelling. This is to symbolize a similar role in which wine
played in the original sotry. Thanks for reading and I look forward to your feedback.
Though I’d read the source story before, I didn’t recognize it here till I read your author’s note—which I think is a testament to how well you’ve switched it up here, since I thought it must be based on an Odysseus adventure I just hadn’t heard of. The narrative voice here was great, too; it honestly felt like this could’ve been a slightly more accessible translation straight from one of the old stories. Nice job, and thanks for an entertaining read.
ReplyDeleteI haven't read the original story, but I liked your version well enough. I wasn't sure if you had added dwarfs as a creative interpretation of the story, but either way it worked out well. I liked that Odysseus had a clever way of getting out of the hut, and it reminded me of something that me or one of my other engineering friends would think of to escape as well. Maybe next time you can try to incorporate more dialogue into your story.
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